50 Word Stories
August 12, 2008
tamika02
THE POLICE WERE AFTER ME, OR WERE THEY!!
“Exuse-me, exuse-me.” The police yelled out as they chased me around the corner. I wasn’t happy because there’s a lot of corners in this town. ” pull over with your hands up.” They yelled.” Never” I yelled back. Not you they said, the one in front of you.”
” I knew that.”
I don’t think that this story is good so can you tell me how to inprove it!
Bad hair day!!
“No! Amelia yelled, My hair is a mess and it’s photos today.” “Mum” she said.” Yes honey” her mum replied. ” My hair is a mess, she said. “ And” her mum asked.” It’s school photos today” Amelia screamed. ” I’m sure it will get better,” she said. Then suddenly……………her hair was neat.
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matthew12 | August 12, 2008 at 6:30 pm
Nice short story I can see you have put every punctuation there is to put in.
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Baylee01 | August 16, 2008 at 12:46 am
i like your blog and i love the background colour “Hot Pink!”.
Your “Bad Hair Day” Story
was great
from Baylee
Thanks